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| #1Subyek: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 3:32 pm | |
| bagi semua silahkan kritik dan saran karcer bikinanku ya
ditunggu komennya |
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| #2Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 5:15 pm | |
| Riz cerita nya bagus ku beri 2 ramen di tunggu lagi chap 3 nya ya |
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| #3Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 5:38 pm | |
| jyahaha .. rizki buat karcer ya .. bagus kok karcernya ...
ramen kuberikan tiap chapternya |
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| #4Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 8:12 pm | |
| terima kasih atas apresiasinya
silahkan kritik dan saran jujur saja gapapa saya ga gigit |
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| #5Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 10:08 pm | |
| ehm.. cerita-nya bagus, Ki.. humor-nya juga sempet bikin ngakak ramen di transfer Kritik dan Saran dari saya: -sebaik-nya lebih menekan-kan pada tanda baca.. Lalu, mengenai huruf kapital pada awalan Nama karakter.. selebih-nya sudah pas :leepose: |
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| #6Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 26/5/2013, 10:22 pm | |
| seperti tanda petik koma gitu ger
ah yang nama itu bikin males ger..aku perbaiki chapter depan ger
thanx saran yg sangat membangun |
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| #7Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 29/5/2013, 7:58 pm | |
| Yao.... Saya mesti bilang cerita ini keren. leluconnya bagus dan menarik. namun jika berkenan perbaiki tata letak dialognya. Secara umum chapter 4 dan 5 mantab. |
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| #8Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 29/5/2013, 8:26 pm | |
| tata letak dialog seperti gimana bang kazu
hehe..bingung maklum nubi |
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| #9Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 29/5/2013, 9:16 pm | |
| Maksudku - Quote :
- Rogue : (memberikan pedangnya) " ini lindungilah apapun yg ingin kau lindungi ".
Nita : " baiklah jika kau nekat aku akan ikut denganmu ".Rizki : " tak baik jika seorang wanita ikut dalam sebuah pertempuran ".
Rogue : " ya putri , lebih baik anda tunggu didalam istana ". yang di bold tata letaknya berbada dengan yang lainnya, jadi kalo bisa ya disamaain, biar terlihat kekonsistenannya. Maaf jika kurang berkenan. |
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| #10Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 30/5/2013, 5:18 am | |
| hehe maaf itu kesalahan ga terlalu memperhatikan saat menulis -_-
apa ada yg kurang lagi |
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| #11Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 31/5/2013, 8:42 pm | |
| wah gan, ceritanya bagus . ane suka gan . lanjut yah .
boleh saran dikit nih gan ?
kalau sempat tolong dong diedit lagi chapter pertamanya seperti kata senpai kazuhiko, agar makin enak dibaca dari awal chapter sampai chapter terbaru.
maaf ya gan kalau cerewet.
maaf jika ada salah.
#bungkuk |
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| #12Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 31/5/2013, 10:41 pm | |
| @igarashi emang bener gan ntar kalo pake pc ane edit chapter 1-3 soalnya lewat hp btw thanx apresiasinya kalo komen jujur aja ane ga gigit gan |
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| #13Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 2/6/2013, 10:11 pm | |
| lanjutkan lagi ceritamu Riz, penambah semangat untukmu kukirimkan ramen ekstra pedas. |
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| #14Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 3/6/2013, 5:22 am | |
| terima kasih bang kazu
jika kacerku masih kurang dan perlu ada penambahan silahkan komen lagi |
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| #15Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 3/6/2013, 7:47 am | |
| Ok brotha, aku akan selalu menantikan kelanjutan ceritamu. |
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| #16Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 12:41 pm | |
| Ceritanya bagus tapi ane belum baca ampe habis sih, Si Nita ceritanya cewek ero gtu? Lalu si rizky cowok yg tau segalanya? kasi dong flashback kenapa si rizky bisa tau sgalanya? atau dia adalah.... karakter kejutan! Overall bagus ramen kukirim |
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| #17Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 3:03 pm | |
| good job kau berhasil menangkap ceritaku
soal flaschback Rizki kenapa bisa tau segalanya nanti akan diceritakan oleh orang lain karena Rizki itu orang yg sangat menjaga privasi |
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| #18Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 3:09 pm | |
| oh good good, ane pnasaran, orgnya tiba2 dteng, minta pedang, lalu ah... mengharukan *tukul style |
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| #19Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 3:33 pm | |
| sedikit bocoran dia mencari semua kekuatan dan jadi pemimpin pemberontak |
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| #20Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 6:22 pm | |
| ini dia yang aku tunggu, ceritamu bagus kawan. Apakah mereka terkena imbas dari kekuatan yang dimiliki Rizki (seperti rekan-rekan Ichigo Kurosaki yang akhirnya memiliki kekuatan spiritual juga)? ramen untukmu Sobat.. |
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| #21Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 6/6/2013, 7:21 pm | |
| terima kasih apresiasinya kembali bang kazu .. jangan lupa tunggu chap berikutnya yg akan rilis dalam waktu dekat |
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| #22Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 8/6/2013, 9:45 pm | |
| widih chapter terakhir-nya udah mulai berubah haha.. udah begitu cukup, Ki.. kek yang di buku cerita kebanyakan
ramen transfered~ |
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| #23Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 9/6/2013, 6:25 am | |
| gimana ger menurutmu bagus chapter terakhir atau yg sebelumnya btw thanx ramennya |
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| #24Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 11/6/2013, 5:34 pm | |
| Perjalanan ceritamu mmulai menunjukkan bahwa semakin lama akan semakin terkuaknya jalan dari ceritamu. Good Job, lanjutkan dengan semangat. |
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| #25Subyek: Re: Komentar light and darkness 11/6/2013, 5:58 pm | |
| terima kasih bang kazu atas apresiasinya kembali
semoga ga bosen liatin karcer ane |
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